When I was considering fics to try and read, this was one of the first I thought of, but I chickened out immediately because it has a lot of dialogue. I'm so glad you did it! It was a pleasure to listen to. It's such an intimate story, I think it needs a particular tone, and you got that.

Nothing set off my alarms. My only thought was that maybe one of the hardest things is when the text specifies the character is saying a line with a particular emotion, like once in this story I think Jack speaks "bitterly." It's almost like a stage direction, but this isn't acting, it's reading, so I'm not sure whether or not a reader should try to convey, and if so, how much. (I'm not saying your reading in any of those cases was distracting. It was just a thought that came up!)

There were a few times the Doctor sounded just a wee bit like Ten, which I liked, because even though he's not Ten, I think he (the character, independent of actors playing him) might sometimes have memories of mannerisms and speech that ghost back in his later incarnations.

This is staying in my permanent playlist. :) I'm such a fan of the story, and I love what you've done with it.